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[The Wall ..Trailer..]

Well....

Although it's obvious that it's based on Deciduous, it really doesn't offer anything as far as story, graphic, or animation styles go. If you like the style of a film, try to emulate it using your own characters and story.

[Rollback Man]

Nice effort

Well, regardless of the time spent, I think it's more critical that you learn from the responses to your movie now. Don't let score keep you from learning from this so you can make your next movie better. I agree completely with Seaspray and also feel you should tone down the flashing screen. Closeups on faces with moving mouths should only be used as a story telling device. If you can't accompany some kind of vocals or text with it, then it becomes extraneous.

ex. 1. You have a close up of a guy laughing and saying "heh heh, I bet that punch hurt".

or

2. You can show the guy getting punched and then the guy laughing.

They both tell the story, it's just up to you as the director to decide which to use. In the case of your movie, you used 1 fairly often, and didn't include the words which throws everyone off. Anyway, good luck on your next piece. :)

[SFVS Episode #3]

Right on. Glad you listened to suggestions

That's looking much better, Listening to your commentary, there were a few things that were unclear that you intended. Such as I wasn't really thinking there was a lightning storm, might want to try to allude more to that. The tree was a bit too far in the background so when it was wobbling, I didn't really think it was going to fall on him either. Although, the unbrella destroying his cranium is a great touch. That made me snicker. All in all, fairly well made. good job.

shampawnya responds:

Thanks for the review!

[SFVS Episode #2]

not too shabby

The big downside is that all jokes you could see coming from a mile away and the 'punchlines' have been overused. On a positive note, the graphics were looking pretty crisp and the sound worked well too. Spilling shampawnya all over your boobs was by far the funniest part of your films too. Is that voice clip from somewhere or did you make it? If you made it, good job. :) if not, good job anyway.

shampawnya responds:

The "Shampawnya" line is from an SNL sktech with Christopher Walken called "The Continental". ShamPawnYa was the nickname I got at my last job based on that sketch and my last name (Champagne). Sorry bout the jokes being lame, but Episode 3 promises to be less predictable. Thanks for the review.

[The Non-Livingstons #001]

awesome man!

I love it. Wicked concept. Absolutely can't get enough.

One strong criticism I have is the pacing of the story. Even though the timing really is great, and its a lot of work to create new compositions all the time, adding one or two different views during the talk between father and son would have made it easier to concentrate on. Because of that sequence, it's a chore to get past it a second or third time, even though I really enjoy the show. You could try to break it up by having a shot where you see Johnny getting vertigo looking at the school while the father is still talking about it. Maybe an over-the-shoulder with Johnny in the foreground and Dad in the background rambling on. Good work Ken, can't wait to see more of these. Fantastic work!

[2000th Kiriban]

great posing

the poses on the character are great. nice work.

[Bounce that Beat]

pretty neat

not too shabby. for your webcomic though, you might want to make sure you pay attention to which side of the hand the thumb is on :P

You misplaced it on the tongue twang and on the bounce loop.

[A Kid And His Dog]

no plot = dull animation

Illustration was crisp but the animation was robotic and there was no story whatsoever. The dog had nothing to do with him buying a fish or walking home or robbers looting a pet store... Every side story has to lead into the main plot at some point to make it feasable. Good luck on your next one and make sure you get pointers from people as you go.

[Heinz the Owl]

nice work, I enjoyed it

this was a pretty good quality animation. Fun little story too. Definitely had a few laughs with the frenetic head movements and reactions. :) Having a solid style within the work along with practice in your art and anatomy are the only suggestions I can give. Your animation and timing sense are quite good.